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September 18th, 2012, 2:05 am

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GabrielsThoughts, September 18th, 2012, 9:32 am

Please don't take this the wrong way...

WHat! No *AIEEEEEE!* or *EEEEEEEEEEEK!* not even and *Eep!*

Good lord, the sound design in this page sucks. I would at least expect a rumbling or a crack.

Let's be honest your work is stellar as always, but even though silence is golden and duct tape is silver, I believe in this instance pantomime isn't enough to express the level of danger there.

On the previous page it was easy to imagine the *tika ticka tika* sounds, on this page not so much.

Even if you have find a way to express sounds visually, without words, I recommend it as a must. For future consideration think of the readers as being separated from your work by a glass wall.

Perhaps a higher contrast "hot" color would make the effect of the wood breaking more noticeable. I don't know.


sky665, September 18th, 2012, 11:47 am

Keep in mind this is typically an animated flash comic, that- in order to post on smackjeeves without having to pay money- I have translated into still pages.

For this part of the story in particular- part 16- was an animated montage. So right now you are basically just looking at stills from an animated short.

I know it doesn't translate as well to still form, but ideally its meant to be viewed in its animated flash form.

You can watch it here: http://fav.me/d5b4edu

GabrielsThoughts, September 18th, 2012, 1:19 pm

Watches video...

My complaint still stands. If you can *poof* you can *Squee!* The special effects are important. Even if they aren't as spectacular as Michael Bay would lead you to believe necessary.

I realize you are doing this on your own time and dime. However, in my not so humble opinion, I think the sound effects would make it more thrilling.

Also, you can supposedly upload flash comics to Comic fury. My plan is to eventually...ultimately release machinama and flash versions of my comic. So I was looking for a place that could do that free of charge.

Deviant art facebook and youtube have file size, type, quality, and time constraints that I cannot adhere too so I wasted an inordinate amount of time looking for things like "newgrounds."

ShinyMew1, June 16th, 2013, 2:28 pm

Well, I think the reason for not having sound effects is because this sequence is more of a montage (not that I know what the author was thinking, so I can't speak for her). When you look at it that way it makes a lot more sense. Personally, I love the effect it creates.

tahrey (Guest), September 3rd, 2013, 5:03 am


I can't believe I just clicked through 225 installments of this without knowing / realising it was a flash comic.

The art style kinda makes sense now I know that... the slightly scratchy, lower-colour characters on top of a smoother, more detailed background.

Still, I think I'ma read through and get up to date using the stills all the same. I'm used to it now :)

(And that's not a criticism of the style, btw... it seemed idiosyncratic, and very cartoony, but not "bad")

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