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September 30th, 2013, 2:00 am

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Mars714, October 2nd, 2013, 12:32 am

Hello! I read though the whole comic recently, and I love it! I'd like to give my critique now:

The facial expressions are absolutely amazing! A total 10 on that. The story is fast paced, (except for the escape from the castle, that was a rather lengthy time with no talking) and has very good logic to back it up. (the time paradox created with Nic's rescue)

However there is something missing from this story equation... The worst thing is I can't quite get my mind around what it is... Is it because Jackie's reason for staying, although it technically pushes the story further feels forced? Or maybe the lack of back story around Jackie & Nic, which is made more noticeable by the shadows of backstory around Derek and Val?

All in all, and despite the missing ingredient, this is an amazing story and I can't wait to read more. Keep up the fantastic work!

sky665, October 2nd, 2013, 12:40 am


Thaaank yoou for taking the time to read my comic and give me a critique! I'm glad you liked it!

And yeah, my biggest regret with this comic is the lack of backstory for Nic and Jackie. I want to add that still somehow, but I feel like I missed the best spot for that MANY chapters ago haha. This is the price I pay for not pre-planning ahead! (Which the whole entire first arc of this comic was me basically coming up with an idea and just GOING for it and then later realizing this is no good and trying to change many things without.. it falling.. TOO much apart!? XD)

I doooo want to add in some more back story stuff for them, maybe as bonus chapters once I finish up this second arc I'm already a good lengths in.

WhiteTigerCubMia, October 3rd, 2013, 3:39 am

Looking at Mars714's comment, makes me ponder. I never felt that way about Jackie's backstory. But I'm kinda realizing that's maybe because I knew Jackie from her OCT days which focused on Jackie's grief about the death of her bro and how he died. Maybe later on, after part two, you can do some thing that recaps or retells what happened during her OCT days? Because I think that's the missing ingredient, people don't know that information about Jackie. I mean you originally created this comic mostly for fans of her rounds, so you didn't really need to go over that stuff, but as it comic went on it started to attract others, so now you do.

(Haha, this is the first time I commented here, I've only commented on the official site, and before that a few times on DA.)

sky665, October 3rd, 2013, 3:45 am


Yess! I think you're totally right! I pretty much avoided their back stories because I've been there and done that with her OCT days haha. (Derek even makes a reference about it in the start of the story) But then I left that all in the dust once I started getting all super hard core story mode with this.

I for sure want to add some more little back story things about them when I can though!

999InTheDark, October 14th, 2013, 2:05 am


I'm sure you could still find a place to add in some of their back story, some little recap of it. Maybe sometime while they are at the planet to look for Val? Something could come up that gets Nic and Jackie to talk a bit about their past just a tad bit?

sky665, October 14th, 2013, 2:28 am


I DID add a little "Jackie's Origins" summary to the start of the comic now - but there ARE going to be some parts coming up where Nic and Jackie will talk about this off and on a bit hmmm! I will consider adding possible flashback images for those parts~ XD

999InTheDark, October 14th, 2013, 3:31 am


Sweet!!! Gonna go back and read that then, and then... I'm definitely looking forward to the next pages coming up!!

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